----- Original Message ----- From: "William Denton" <
buff@pobox.com>
> Let's compare the important plot element of being
hit on the head and
> knocked unconscious.
>
> First: "I opened the door and walked in. There was a
noise behind me and
> the back of my head exploded in pain. A pool of
blackness opened in front
> of me and I fell in."
>
> Third: "He opened the door and walked in. There was
a noise behind him
> and the back of his head exploded in pain. A pool of
blackness opened in
> front of him and he fell in."
>
> Both work well, so we're OK on that.
Sorry to disagree, but, in the case of the first person
viewpoint, if a pool of blackness opened in front of you (ie
you lost consciousness), how could you subsequently observe
that you fell in? In this instance third person is more
convincing.
Al Guthrie
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